Jump to content

Archived

This topic is now archived and is closed to further replies.

Dex

Short film I made for class.

Recommended Posts

Dex    12,018

Acting is horrible but I edited, wrote and directed it. Feedback is appreciated,

Share this post


Link to post
Share on other sites




Dex    12,018

I liked it thought that was pretty cool, enjoyed the ending.

Thanks! Glad you enjoyed it!

Share this post


Link to post
Share on other sites
Dex    12,018

You in film school? Which one?

Also, what did you have to do with making this?

nvm

Couldn't afford film school. Working my way through community college. Hopefully get an internship and continue my education. Also what?

Share this post


Link to post
Share on other sites
SZ James (banned)    5,161

One thing I'll say about film school in general.

Don't be pressured into making more serious stuff unless you want to. Everything you make right now is going to be absolute crap and down the road you will look back and cringe at just how awful your early stuff was. I made sure some of mine were never going to see the light of day and burned that poo to the ground. The main thing is your getting it out of your system and you are learning how it all works.

So don't be afraid to have fun with it and generate the lulz.

Share this post


Link to post
Share on other sites
SZ James (banned)    5,161

Couldn't afford film school. Working my way through community college. Hopefully get an internship and continue my education. Also what?

Oic.

Get an internship where? What are you aiming for exactly?

e: also sorry for the invasiveness I'm just curious

Share this post


Link to post
Share on other sites
Dex    12,018

Oic.

Get an internship where? What are you aiming for exactly?

e: also sorry for the invasiveness I'm just curious

Well I'd love to work for myself at some point but possibly an internship for a studio maybe learn under other directors, cinematographers. Also you were a film major? If so do you have any feedback for my video?

Share this post


Link to post
Share on other sites
Dex    12,018

Yes, for a short while at least

I'm goin to bed but I might type out something tomorrow...

Alright sounds good.

Share this post


Link to post
Share on other sites
SZ James (banned)    5,161

First, I'm not at all an expert and you don't have to take anything I say as the gospel. I'm guessing you just want a few simple thoughts.

You said directing and cinematography, so I'll focus on that. The intro was the part I liked the most. Good music, locations, etc. I noticed when you had two guys standing from across the room you panned from one person to the next as they each spoke. It could just be because I have a headache atm, but it's a bit nauseating. Maybe just reframe so that everyone is onscreen or stick to a shot/countershot. Same goes for the scene on the porch. Show both actors on screen if they're supposed to be talking to each other.

That's really all I got for now unless you want something more specific. I'm still learning this sh*t too.

e: The intro was my favorite part is what I meant to type.

  • Pie 1

Share this post


Link to post
Share on other sites
Dex    12,018

No really thank you for the insight and yes the intro is my favourite part as well. I love no dialogue scenes in my films with only music to tell the story. I did the same thing with one of my past films.

There were several issues after it was rendering like in the beginning the faded black shots were supposed to have the other video track that was overlayed in their spot. Also just a few bad scene changes when my girlfriend was moving.

Share this post


Link to post
Share on other sites
SZ James (banned)    5,161

I was gonna say that you would probably be good at making non-narrative stuff and whathaveyou

Short films are harder for me and many others because I'm geared towards developing characters and other nonsense. You have to think of it as telling a short joke.

Not much back story, and every detail must be essential to the punchline or else it won't be funny. If all that makes sense.

Share this post


Link to post
Share on other sites
cultclassiccat    547

Would filming scenes with multiple cameras help the flow? Maybe isolate certain close-ups in scenes with a broad overall frame, emphasizing, instead of panning around? Also, depth of the shot is important. Finding that is probably going to come with time though.

Share this post


Link to post
Share on other sites

×